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E and save her loved ones Zoya opens the package and discovers two unusual data cards one that allows her to fight back against the mafia and another which may hold the key to everlasting li. I’m not normally a uick reader but I was drawn into the world of The Immortality Game from the opening chapter through the ending The futuristic setting was immediately and expertly introduced and the female lead character Zoya had a good girl appeal from the opening dialogue with her roguish brother The world after The Dark Times is further built through the perspective of Marcus the young son of a deceased millionaire who invented the program cure for the “internet virus” that hackers used to topple governments and cripple the business world The program also made possible a widespread addiction called “meshing” which nearly destroys humanity to the point of extinctionThis story is action packed but has a steady pace that drew me completely into the world Although filled with cyber speak it doesn't take a degree or interest in science or engineering to relate to the simple terminology If you've watch the world news or own your own computer you’ll be familiar with slots discs wireless clones air cars intergalactic space travel and the concept that “there is always a war somewhere” Mr Cross takes exploratory technology of today sets it in a world little than a hundred years in the future and adds an intense twist to world politics and everyday game playing and viceI enjoyed how the author took two average people who would likely never meet and who have no extra ordinary skills placed them in a situation to make choices between loyalty family and basic morality and used the available technology and societal rules of the time to force them to rise to the challenges And who isn't curious about the inner workings of the Russian Mafia and how normal citizens survive in such a hostile environmentThe Immortality Game gave me a sense of hope for the future even while it listed the devastation of relying on the virtual pleasures of cyber space and cyber lovers the loss of individuality and connection with people even the loss of life Marcus’ deceased father integrated his genius mind into the internet and retains his basic personality while seeking the genetic compatibility of a clone body to restore his humanity and he uses his world wide connection to protect his only son from the oblivion of “meshing” Zoya has hope of using the found technology to assist her in rescuing her brother her friends and her hope of having a child of her own Marcus is searching for his purpose in life and a reason to remain addiction free without the protective firewalls of his father’s interventionI think this story would appeal to readers who enjoy “a little romance and technology” in the story without it overwhelming the concepts of intrigue and the search for immortality I give The Immortality Game five stars and would definitely read titles by the author Ted Cross

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The Immortality GameMoscow 2138 With the world only beginning to recover from the complete societal collapse of the late 21st Century Zoya scrapes by prepping corpses for funerals and dreams of saving enough mo. A slow start but then the tension riseHere is my full reviewOn 8th of January I read following post over at Pat's Fantasy HotlistCalling on all self publishedindie speculative fiction writers Final UpdateThere was a book mentioned in the post which aroused my interest I was impressed when I read that the author paid 2000 USD out of his own pocket for the cover art done by the well known Stephan MartiniereI was surprised by the cheap price for the digital copy and based on price cover and blurb I decided to buy a copy of The Immortality Game digital November 2014 Kindle ASIN B00PGW5YZ8 by Ted Cross I had expectations and wanted to get the answer to the uestion Does the The Immortality Game lives up to its coverThe DeliveryThe 278 pages are divided into 35 named chapters followed by an epilogueThe cover serve the main purpose to raise attention perfectlyIt seems a futuristic big city plays a certain role which the book description confirmTake place and fasten seat belt in Ted Cross' virtual time machine The date display in front of you shows 2138 and a scarcely audible voice in your head murmurs Welcome to MoscowA shiver cross your body when you see a young woman working with a corpse and your nose recognise the smell of embalming fluid and decay The young woman is Zoya and her job is not the average eight to five office job The world has changed and in order to survive one can't be pickyA package containing two data cards and the death of her brother Georgy set the story in motion which will keep you captivated until the unexpected end which is an end and an option for a seuelBut there is much between the beginning and the end which deserve to be mentionedAs you assume right Zoya is one of the main characters She is strong and vulnerable at the same time She does not hide her emotions and she always believe in the good in mankind which take her uite often into troubleThere are a lot of other people who have an impact on Zoya's live on different levels and direct and indirect Even Ted Cross does not tend to write extended description of beings and places he deliver in a few words characterisations which blossom based on your skill of imagination or to use other words the imagination the betterThere are at least to characters which must be mentioned There is Javier Saenz who is a well known computer scientist Unfortunately you can't meet him in person because he died years ago But he still exist in the digital worldHe is a virtual person and highly interested in the data cards His body in the real world is his only son Marcus who is a former mesh addicted He is a kind and intelligent person In order to get the data cards Javier Saenz send his son to Moscow where most of the action takes placeBeside that a lot persons and fractions each with their own agenda are involved in the action paced and emotional race to get the two data cardsThe world is not a pleasant one It does not matter if you look at it world wide Russia China and America West work on different strategies to go to space in order to inhabit other planets It is difficult because there is still no FLT drive availableMillions of people are mesh addicted Mesh is an all consuming virtual reality place There are people who live or less constantly in the MeshRussia There is no democracy Instead Army Russian Mafia Politicians and others like the group of people living in the underground fight for power Not to forget a group of Russian scientists in the hand of the ArmyIn the end or less everything is related to the two unusual data cards which reminded me in a way of a small piece of jewelry well known as my preciousIs Zoya the female counterpart to someone with big naked feetBelong the Russian scientists to the fellowship of Who will get the data cards and for what purpose they will be used The title of the book is the shortest description of what you can expectIt is The Immortality Game a game which is like a war with a lot of violence and breakneck action heartbreaking moments thoughtful passages and a pinch of scienceNevertheless it is the humanity in form of Zoya supported by Marcus and many which shows that mankind is not lost as long as there are human beings like themDear Ted Crossthank you very much for investing 2000 USD for the coverWithout I would have missed your excellent storyThe content of The Immortality Game lives up to its cover and Please write such excellent books I will definitely have a look at your boosk even the covers would be totally black

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review The Immortality Game 100 ✓ Moscow 2138 With the world only beginning to recover from the complete societal collapse of the late 21st Century Zoya scrapes by prepping corpses for funerals and dreams of saving enough money to have a child When her brother forces her to bring him a mysterious package she witnesses his murder and finds herself on the runNey to have a child When her brother forces her to bring him a mysterious package she witnesses his murder and finds herself on the run from ruthless mobsters Frantically trying to stay aliv. You guys are aware that my attempt to read and review a self published SFF work sort of went down the crapper last year I felt kind of bad because I really wanted to give an indie speculative fiction author's book a fair shot and come what may Most of the Hotlist's readers seemed to be against the idea maintaining that it would likely be a total waste of time that self published novels sucked yada yada yada And yet against my better judgement I elected to do it anyway Perhaps I should have listened to themIndie writer Ted Cross long time Hotlist follower communicated with me last fall touching base to see if perhaps I'd be interested in giving his self published cyberpunk tale a go since I hadn't followed through with the experience in 2014 My curiosity was piued when I discovered that he paid 2000 out of his own pocket to have the gorgeous cover art done by the talented Stephan Martiniere because he wanted the novel to stand out from other self published works out thereThey say that you can't judge a book by its cover and it's true in this case Cross mentionned that he felt it was money well spent that it was maybe better than investing in a developmental editor Having read the whole thing I beg to differ Although it's well written The Immortality Game wasn't ready to be published Which in light of the shortcomings on which I'll soon elaborate is why agents and editors passed on the manuscriptHere's the blurbMoscow 2138 With the world only beginning to recover from the complete societal collapse of the late 21st Century Zoya scrapes by prepping corpses for funerals and dreams of saving enough money to have a child When her brother forces her to bring him a mysterious package she witnesses his murder and finds herself on the run from ruthless mobsters Frantically trying to stay alive and save her loved ones Zoya opens the package and discovers two unusual data cards one that allows her to fight back against the mafia and another which may hold the key to everlasting lifeOne thing that most self published authors appear to have in common is their low opinion of professional editors Too often they are portrayed as evil monsters whose only desire in life is to make sure that said authors never get published A minority expound on the fact that those same editors almost never take a chance on writers whose works don't fit within the confines of any of the popular speculative fiction labels It's true that being an editor means that they must also wear a businessman or businesswoman's hat as it's their job to buy and put together a novel that will sell and that if one's work seems hard to market they may pass on it But I feel that the bulk of self published works don't fit in that category Agents and editors are dying to find the next big thing or any uality read that will sell for that matter Ask any SFF authors and they will all acknowledge how their editors made their manuscripts better True publishing is a tough nut to crack but that's the way love goes Editors are there to make sure no author will release anything less than their best effort If editors were just fucktards on power trips bent on dominating publishing and making it their life's work to prevent indie authors from ever ending up in bookstores big names like Richard Morgan Joe Abercrombie and George R R Martin wouldn't praise Simon Spanton Gillian Redfearn and Anne Groell respectively for all the positive influence they have had on their many books Nor would Patrick Rothfuss be professing his undying love for Betsy Wollheim for all that she has done for him since he signed with Daw BooksThe truth of the matter is that the aforementioned agents and editors are probably passing on these manuscripts because they are simply unfit to be published in their current form Ted Cross' The Immortality Game sadly falls in that category Like many other self published works Cross' novel contains the seeds of what could become a good and entertaining tale But I fear that it needs a number of revisions and is probably uite a few rewrites away from ever being adeuate to catch an agent or an editor's interest Unfortunately like many other writers before him instead of going back to the drawing board and diving back into this manuscript to try to fix what isn't working Cross took the path of least resistance and elected to self publish itNow Ted Cross' The Immortality Game could well be better than the majority of self published books out there But that's not saying much It is extremely well written and it's obvious that he polished this manuscript in a professional manner The prose is fluid and easy to read so there is no problem in that regard Problem is the storylines often make no sense and the characterization is at times mediocre and so so at best It's in those areas of the manuscript that a developmental editor could have helped Cross immensely Authors are often too enad with their works and aren't necessarily the best of judges when it comes to put their finger on what works well and what doesn't A neutral party can usually focus on the strengths and weaknesses and offer constructive feedback on such matters And evidently Cross' test readers didn't do a good job in that regard Indeed the flaws that prevented him from getting an agent or an editor are uite flagrant When I asked him about it Cross replied that his beta readers didn't point out any such flaws In which case they did him a disservice Needless to say spending that 2000 to hire an editor would have been a much better investmentIt appears that Cross wanted this one to read like a page turning cyberpunk technothriller Hence for the sake of a crisp rhythm it looks as though the worldbuilding was kept to a bare minimum Trouble is this robbed the story of any sort of depth which doesn't work very well Finding the right balance between good storytelling and a uick moving pace can be tricky But Ted Cross failed in that particular endeavor The backdrop of this tale is a near future world in which the proverbial shit has hit the fan The bulk of the novel takes place in Russia where various war lords have taken control of the country On the other side of the Atlantic it appears that Mormons now control a vast chunk of the USA There are a few mentions of the Dark Times the period during which everything collapsed around the world but nothing which could give us a better grasp of what actually took place and why things are as they are now in 2138What truly killed the book for me was the characterization especially the dialogue The narrative itself isn't bad but things immediately go downhill as soon as characters start to talk or think To my dismay the dialogue is full of exchanges worthy of B movies featuring Steven Seagal or Jean Claude Van Damme Yes it's that bad especially any back and forth involving the scientist Tyoma or the mobster Tavik I'm pretty sure that this is not what Ted Cross was aiming for At first I thought that perhaps it was just me so I did a copy and paste of a few scenes and sent them to six of my friends who are avid readers I told them that I was beta reading a manuscript for my agent and didn't tell them that this was a self published book that was already on the market They 3 men and 3 women opined that the dialogue was atrocious and the monologues going on inside the characters' mind brutal Five out of six of them alluded to the B movie esue style of the exchanges while another mentioned seeing better dialogue in a porn flick Unless Cross was looking for something that could reach even the lowest common denominator the dialogue truly kills this novel Another major shortcoming of The Immortality Game is that the two main protagonists Zoya and Marcus never act the way genuine people would I wouldn't call them dumb but they excercise absolutely no judgement throughout the tale They always make the wrong decision and everything feels contrived to keep the story moving in the direction the author is aiming for Unfortunately by doing so they make the teenage cast of a Friday the 13th installment you know the ones running around almost naked going down a dark cellar with the lights off and getting murdered in the dumbest ways look like absolute geniuses The storylines often make absolutely no sense Especially Zoya's; this girl has such poor decision making skills that she gets almost everyone she loves killed And Marcus sad puppie that he is just goes along on this mad uest putting his own life at risk at every turn for a girl he met a few hours before The whole thing doesn't ring true and is hard to follow as nothing makes sense from the beginning This is definitely something that an editor could have helped fixAnother problem with The Immortality Game is that I feel it's a case of Cross biting off than he could chew His attempt to weave together this impossible love story with the cloningimmortality plotline all the while involving the army and the Russian mafia was just a bit too much By exploring those various plotlines the extraneous is often brought to the forefront and it feels as though the author often loses track of what matters Once this is something an editor could have helped fixIn the end The Immortality Game is obviously Ted Cross' love child It's the kind of tale he obviously loves and wants to read And that's the kicker His love for this story blinds him to its shortcomings and prevents him from seeing what's wrong with it He came up with an interesting premise and the whole thing shows signs that with work it could be a compelling and entertaining read But in its current form those shortcomings simply make it impossible for the book to stand well on its own As such paying 2000 for that Martiniere cover turned out to be a mistake He would have been better served with the services of an editor who would have helped him clean up his manucript and make everything betterNormally I would have stopped reading because I hate to waste time on inferior SFF works when my plate is already full with works from established authors But I went public and I said I would do this and I promised Cross to give his book a shot I hate to give something a bad score but the truth of the matter is that The Immortality Game wasn't ready to be published It shows potential true but it's a number of rewrites away from being good enough to be read at large Barring an editor Ted Cross needs a number of honest and objective beta readers who are not afraid to tell him what doesn't work with his manuscripts This guy has talent and good ideas It's in the execution that he needs to improveThe final verdict 410For reviews wwwfantasyhotlistblogspotcom